BenPaz Posted May 31, 2016 Share Posted May 31, 2016 (edited) Part 1 Well it was a dark and stormy night... To Be Continued Edited June 5, 2018 by jjsthekid Clarity and Consistency Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr. Saturn Posted May 31, 2016 Share Posted May 31, 2016 bad story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 (edited) Part 2 Twelve years later I've grown up to be a cool guy who like Spongebob and memes. Then something changed. When I discovered SBM. I started learning the memes of SBM and SBC Music. ALL HAIL ANGRY BIRDS. It slowly changed my life... To be continued Edited June 1, 2016 by BenPaz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 Can this be moved to Spin Offs and Literature? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WhoBibbles Posted June 1, 2016 Share Posted June 1, 2016 2 minutes ago, BenPaz said: Can this be moved to Spin Offs and Literature? Then report it to staff, they'll move it there Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 @staff thanks for moving this Part 3 Then all of a sudden one day the fire nation attacked.The stormy night had grown more stormy. The darkness had become a cloud around the trouble that was about to bloom. The fire nation used their firebending techniques to kill all the SBM members. The member known as "CookiePaz" eventually became the only guy who survived. He didn't have any powers and couldn't take down the fire nation. Cookie didn't know what to do. To Be Continued soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 Part 4 Cookie sat and pondered for a while. He wondered, "How do I save the world from the Fire Nation". Hello a voice called from the distance. It was ssj. He had come to revive all of SBM. However as soon as he came the Fire Nation realized their problem. ssj was killed by the Nation. Cookie mourned at his death and wondered what would happen now. He needed to revive SSJ with the Dragon Balls. To be continued tomorrow, I'm going to bed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
crushingmayhem Posted June 1, 2016 Share Posted June 1, 2016 Try making the story longer or else it'll just be a repeat of the short spinoff problem we had once. But anyway, the story has some potential, try giving it more characters and setting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 Part 5 Cookie went to ponder about ways he could find the Dragon Balls. One way he thought of was going to the Dragon Ball Wikia to see the Dragon Balls locations. However he couldn't find actual Dragon Balls. So Cookie went to watch the entirety of everything DragonBall related. From the KFC commericals to the actual show, he learned how to find the Dragon Balls. Work in Progress Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CDCB Posted June 1, 2016 Share Posted June 1, 2016 See, the point of spin-offs/lits is to actually write them... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 1, 2016 Author Share Posted June 1, 2016 Part 6 Cookie had to find the Dragon Balls. He kept watching all of the show. One problem arose. Cookie had become addicted to the show. His life had been taken over by the show. His life had been ruined. The Fire Nations doom had come closer. They had started to go to more major places. They started to attack the government. Cookie had to leave the house. He had to get out of his addiction. But instead he moved on to another show. Then another. The world was falling apart as he kept watching. However eventually Cookie realized his problems. He had finally stopped watching new shows. His last show was One Punch Man. He had gotten out of his house and realized the hell that was in front of him. Every house except his had been burnt. Everyone seemed dead. Cookie stood there silent and just stood in sadness. His childhood, everything he had lived through in his life was gone. He knew there had to be a way to bring the world back to it's former glory. He knew a way. He had to go and actually get the Dragon Balls. The only problem was that he still didn't know where to find them. They couldn't be on Earth and all the spaceships had been destroyed by the Fire Nation. He decided to learn how to fly. TO BE CONTINUED 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 2, 2016 Author Share Posted June 2, 2016 (edited) Does anyone actually read this story? Part 7 Flying. The way of freedom for something like a bird. What every human wishes for. Now how will Cookie learn how to fly? First he goes to the library. Almost everything in the library was burned. The books had a smell of ash and the room's books were all sliced in half. Cookie looked around wondering why a sword was used by the Fire Nation. He went to look around for the book about flying. However it turned out almost every book was gone except for one. One Punch Man Volume 10. He read it quickly filling his addiction. It was over too soon. He had no purpose in life. Thinking about his life, Cookie realizes how much he wants to die. Everything he loved was taken away. His family, his friends all due to his addiction. He decided to run off of a cliff. He ran to make himself die faster. "Goodbye" Cookie said to the world. The sky's red blood look was slowly going away. He thought about how he was the only "not Firebender" left. All of a sudden a whoosh sound is heard. When he opened his eyes he saw himself in the air being held by what seemed like a shadowy figure of ssj. "CookiePaz" the shadow said spookfully "You have to live". A determined look fell under Cookie's face. He needed to find more people to help him on his journey. "shadow guy" Cookie said with a highly serious and determined look "You want to join me on my quest?". "Call me Umbra" the shadow stated, "i'll join you". The hellish sky was disappearing. Meanwhile in another land, the Fire Nation has learned of Cookie and Umbra's alliance. Abney, new leader of the Fire Nation reports about the potential problems. "Everyone here realizes 'Umbra' is just ssj's ghost right" Abney say in a wicked but sly manner "The two of them combined will kill us all!". Slamming his fist on the table Abney says "WE NEED TO BUILD A WALL!". Continuari Tommorow Edited June 2, 2016 by BenPaz 3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Snake Posted June 2, 2016 Share Posted June 2, 2016 1 minute ago, BenPaz said: Does anyone actually read this story? Guess who? 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Clappy Posted June 2, 2016 Share Posted June 2, 2016 Unpopular opinion, but I think this story is actually kind of funny. The first few chapters definitely needed much more meat to them, but not all spinoffs need to be written that heavily long to be funny. I don't know, I just feel more effort is being put into this than those lazy joke spinoffs from three years ago (or at least now). Keep it going. It might lead somewhere good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SpongeOddFan Posted June 2, 2016 Share Posted June 2, 2016 This is hilarious, keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 2, 2016 Author Share Posted June 2, 2016 Good, people do read it. Thanks for the feedback. Part 8 It's been 3 days since then. After the news from the Fire Lord comes, Umbra decides to teach Cookie how to fly on his own. Cookie gets a running start off the hill. The sky has completely cleared. The wall has started to be built. It has grown 3 inches taller. Cookie realizes that he will never fly. He tries to see how Goku did it and realized... He had ridden on a cloud! A banner had appeared on the wall. It said "make earth not trash again. Fire Nation is supreme" . Umbra laughed for 20 minutes. Cookie came up to him from behind sneakily. "What's the matter!" Cookie screamed. Umbra was startled and looked behind him to see that somehow, Cookie was flying with no trouble. "Hey, Umbra who had cut the books in half at the library?". "It was me" Umbra said "I have a really cool looking sword. It talks and has a personality". "You know Umbra, that sounds like a worse version of Bleach. Oh wait Bleach was trash anyway" Cookie said. Umbra laughed and said "Then why did you watch all of it". Cookie was silent for a moment "Let's go see your sword". Spongebob time card "one eternity later" shows up. We're finally here. "The swords name is Jeff". Cookie laughed hysterically. "Jeff XD LOL. I'm sorry for that massive breakdown". "Don't worry it's fine" Umbra said sarcastically. Jeff was a very short sword. he looked puny and its blade seemed to be broken. "I'll take the sword" Cookie said eager to be a swordfighter. "NO" Umbra said. "This is my sword only." Jeff screams "Let him take the sword. He sounds like the perfect weak trash I need for myself. Someone needs to take me someday. You know what ssj. I Fucking hate you. You do nothing for me". "Wait Umbra, you're ssj?" Cookie said surprised. "Yeah of course". "Go wait what's your name again" the sword said. "My name's Cookie". Cookie takes the sword and feels the power flow through him. An anime addict's dream is to be a sword fighter. Just like Rororonoa Zoro. "So Cookie what do you think". ssj said with a smile. "This is so cool". They walked out of the shack in style Continuing in a couple of hours. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CDCB Posted June 2, 2016 Share Posted June 2, 2016 Try splitting this into paragraphs. It'll be a lot easier to read. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 2, 2016 Author Share Posted June 2, 2016 Good, people do read it. Thanks for the feedback. Part 8 It's been 3 days since then. After the news from the Fire Lord comes, Umbra decides to teach Cookie how to fly on his own. Cookie gets a running start off the hill. The sky has completely cleared. The wall has started to be built. It has grown 3 inches taller. Cookie realizes that he will never fly. He tries to see how Goku did it and realized... He had ridden on a cloud! A banner had appeared on the wall. It said "make earth not trash again. Fire Nation is supreme" . Umbra laughed for 20 minutes. Cookie came up to him from behind sneakily. "What's the matter!" Cookie screamed. Umbra was startled and looked behind him to see that somehow, Cookie was flying with no trouble. "Hey, Umbra who had cut the books in half at the library?". "It was me" Umbra said "I have a really cool looking sword. It talks and has a personality". "You know Umbra, that sounds like a worse version of Bleach. Oh wait Bleach was trash anyway" Cookie said. Umbra laughed and said "Then why did you watch all of it". Cookie was silent for a moment "Let's go see your sword". Spongebob time card "one eternity later" shows up. We're finally here. "The swords name is Jeff". Cookie laughed hysterically. "Jeff XD LOL. I'm sorry for that massive breakdown". "Don't worry it's fine" Umbra said sarcastically. Jeff was a very short sword. he looked puny and its blade seemed to be broken. "I'll take the sword" Cookie said eager to be a swordfighter. "NO" Umbra said. "This is my sword only." Jeff screams "Let him take the sword. He sounds like the perfect weak trash I need for myself. Someone needs to take me someday. You know what ssj. I Fucking hate you. You do nothing for me". "Wait Umbra, you're ssj?" Cookie said surprised. "Yeah of course". "Go wait what's your name again" the sword said. "My name's Cookie". Cookie takes the sword and feels the power flow through him. An anime addict's dream is to be a sword fighter. Just like Rororonoa Zoro. "So Cookie what do you think". ssj said with a smile. "This is so cool". They walked out of the shack in style Continuing in a couple of hours. 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 2, 2016 Author Share Posted June 2, 2016 (edited) 1 minute ago, BenPaz said: Good, people do read it. Thanks for the feedback. Part 8 It's been 3 days since then. After the news from the Fire Lord comes, Umbra decides to teach Cookie how to fly on his own. Cookie gets a running start off the hill. The sky has completely cleared. The wall has started to be built. It has grown 3 inches taller. Cookie realizes that he will never fly. He tries to see how Goku did it and realized... He had ridden on a cloud! A banner had appeared on the wall. It said "make earth not trash again. Fire Nation is supreme" . Umbra laughed for 20 minutes. Cookie came up to him from behind sneakily. "What's the matter!" Cookie screamed. Umbra was startled and looked behind him to see that somehow, Cookie was flying with no trouble. "Hey, Umbra who had cut the books in half at the library?". "It was me" Umbra said "I have a really cool looking sword. It talks and has a personality". "You know Umbra, that sounds like a worse version of Bleach. Oh wait Bleach was trash anyway" Cookie said. Umbra laughed and said "Then why did you watch all of it". Cookie was silent for a moment "Let's go see your sword". Spongebob time card "one eternity later" shows up. We're finally here. "The swords name is Jeff". Cookie laughed hysterically. "Jeff XD LOL. I'm sorry for that massive breakdown". "Don't worry it's fine" Umbra said sarcastically. Jeff was a very short sword. he looked puny and its blade seemed to be broken. "I'll take the sword" Cookie said eager to be a swordfighter. "NO" Umbra said. "This is my sword only." Jeff screams "Let him take the sword. He sounds like the perfect weak trash I need for myself. Someone needs to take me someday. You know what ssj. I Fucking hate you. You do nothing for me". "Wait Umbra, you're ssj?" Cookie said surprised. "Yeah of course". "Go wait what's your name again" the sword said. "My name's Cookie". Cookie takes the sword and feels the power flow through him. An anime addict's dream is to be a sword fighter. Just like Rororonoa Zoro. "So Cookie what do you think". ssj said with a smile. "This is so cool". They walked out of the shack in style Continuing in a couple of hours. How did I post this twice? Made my posts split into paragraphs for easier reading. Edited June 2, 2016 by BenPaz Notification Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BenPaz Posted June 3, 2016 Author Share Posted June 3, 2016 Part 9 As they walk out of the shack, Jeff asks Cookie "Y'know I can barely cut anyone right". Cookie stops and gets a sad look on his face. "Well Jeff, i'll still use you anyway". ssj said with a stern tone "This is why I told you that only I use the sword." "Look at me using my sword fighting skills" ssj said. ssj took the sword and it grew at least 20 feet. It grew tons of spikes on it too. The sword eventually grew as tall as Abney's wall. Abney looked at the top of the wall and saw ssj standing there looking all cool and shit. Abney wondered "what the :dolphin noise: is he doing. ssj jumps and slices the entire wall in half. Cookie looks up at the bond ssj and Jeff have with one another. "How dare you leave your own site ssj" ssj looked angry and tried to use his sword, but his self esteem was lowered. The sword was shrinking and its spikes were slowly disappearing. Abney used his firebending to burn ssj alive. Cookie decided to take the sword and try to use it. The sword was shrinking. Jeff's soul had risen. The sword was becoming a bland and monotonous sword. Cookie swung the sword and he felt another spark. A large lightning bolt was released. His eyes had become a bright white. It sliced Abney in half while Cookie fell into a coma. 7 days pass. Cookie wakes up in Fire Nation clothing wondering what happened. "Cookie," a voice said "You've become the Fire Lord" To Be Continued later maybe 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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