Ninramaburgergirl Posted July 19, 2012 Share Posted July 19, 2012 (i started walking to the krusty krab) me=yes!!! i can finally try a krabby patty!!! (i go up to order one...) me=hey squidward one krabby patty please..... squid=uh.....ok....how did you know my name..... me=uh....ive been here a while...... squid=whatever....spongebob!! one krabby patty!! (spongebob makes the krabby patty and puts his head out the window and gives it to squidward.....i almost scream and pass out from seeing spongebob) sb=hi...who are u? me=im....a.....im......a.....s-s-s-s-s-spandyfan..... sb=well hi there!! i'm spongebob squarepants (he reaches out his hand to me and i take it,we shake hands) me=n-n-n-n-n-n-n-n-nice to meet you........ sb=are you ok? (i snap out of it) me=im fine really sb=well i have to get back to work maybe we can talk on my lunch break. me=ok.... (lunch break....sb comes out and sits at a table where i am) sb=hey spandyfan....say....what does that name mean anyway..... me=oh nothing.... sb=ok. (sandy comes in) (i test sb....tehe....) me=say spongebob whos that who just came in? (i piont to sandy) sb=oh....thats sandy....the prettiest girl in the sea...... me=(i smirk) what did u say..... sb=uh....... me=spongebob i heard you....can we talk after you work.... sb=sure....(hes still looking at her) me=ok thanks (i snap him out of it,sandy comes over) sandy=hey spongebob,whos this? sb=sandy this is spandyfan,spandyfan this is sandy sandy=howdy me=hello sb=hey girls my lunch break is over i have to go bye me=bye spongebob sandy=see ya spongebob me=so....sandy are you and spongebob friends? sandy=u huh yea why? me=just wondering..i have to go now see ya later sandy=ok bye end of part 1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ClassicNickelodeon Fan 1 Posted July 19, 2012 Share Posted July 19, 2012 Has potental, but i'd work on Grammer, and less explanation points. I also recommend a title for your spin-off as well. Otherwise, it's pretty good. Nice job spandy! EDIT: Why is this in the Shipyard? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ninramaburgergirl Posted July 19, 2012 Author Share Posted July 19, 2012 thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ClassicNickelodeon Fan 1 Posted July 19, 2012 Share Posted July 19, 2012 np Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
box Posted July 19, 2012 Share Posted July 19, 2012 It's an intriguing idea, spandy. I'd work on grammar, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ron Posted July 19, 2012 Share Posted July 19, 2012 Pretty good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wumbo Posted July 19, 2012 Share Posted July 19, 2012 Good job. Yeah, as others have said, I'd watch the grammar, but it's not too bad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ninramaburgergirl Posted July 19, 2012 Author Share Posted July 19, 2012 thanks guys Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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